CONSIDER YELLOW
- THESIS
- A contained thriller with a real engine — and a third act that quietly hands the engine back. The premise sells the room; pages 78 through 104 un-sell it.
- BLOCKER
- The antagonist's leverage dissolves on page 81, two scenes before it's supposed to. Everything after coasts.
- FIX
- Move the reveal to the midpoint and make keeping the secret cost the protagonist something on screen by page 60. The finale stops coasting the moment the leverage is mutual.